26: Reversal

We made it to the last chapter!

~~~ Thank you! Thank you! Thank you! ~~~

I mentioned at the start of this that I’d be working without a net.  We made it across the tightrope to the last chapter of a brand-new beta, which of course now needs some test reading and feedback.  Although it was a bumpy ride, your views, likes, and shares really encourage me to no end.  A huge thanks to you for keeping me going.

Now that the story’s coming to a close, I’d love to hear beta reader comments on:

  1. What worked and what didn’t.
  2. What felt superfluous or scant.  
  3. What seemed missing or perhaps too ubiquitous.

Please leave your thoughts, questions, and suggestions in a comment below!


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Midword: On Diana & Jung

Writing and Revisions

I’ve made a major change as I revise this current Beta.  I’ve added a new character.  Not new, per se, but new to this draft.   She was drifting around in my subconscious awhile, but, as I mentioned in a previous post, my waking brain kept telling me there was no way she’d fit. Continue reading

25: Peer Pressure

Chapter One here.


INT. A STABLE – NIGHT

A crowd of artisans and soldiers are cleaning up — stacking sawhorses, stabling work horses, hanging up tools.  Soldiers chat.  Martin leans over another list. 

Loren enters the doorway, a brace of bottles in one hand.  SERVANTS (ND) linger behind him as he pushes into the crowd. Continue reading

Names: Diana

This character is late coming in the game, but she’s part of a major revision.  I’ve already added her into previous posts and the upcoming Wednesday post this week.  More details soon.


 

DIANA

“heavenly, divine”

When westerners think of Russian names, they probably don’t think of “Diana.” Among Russian names, it’s pronounced “DEE-ana.”  This Latin name shares a root with zeus:  dyeus, which can also be tied to the Russian word dyen, for “day.”  Diana is almost always pictured or sculpted with a quiver and arrows, and she’s often accompanied by a deer.

In Roman Mythology, Diana is associated with the moon in the heavens, hunting among human beings, and forests in nature.   Her similarity to Artemis may also link her to wisdom and chastity.  She was seen as the caretaker of pregnant women.  According to one scholar’s theory, this may be be why she was also thought to guarantee the succession of kings.

On a personal note, when I hear Diana pronounced this way, I think of how the “D” stands taller than the rest of the word like a half-moon.  The second half, “Anna,” is associated with grace or favor.  To play with the words a bit, the name “Dyena” could be taken to mean day of grace, and have some subtle association with names like Ivan, which mean given by G-d.   The Western pronunciation of “DI-ana,” in turn, might imply a double blessing.

The name Diana brings to mind a person who might be:

  • a clever maiden
  • a wise matron
  • a doctor or service worker
  • a guardian or caretaker